Comments on: our american sentences http://mygorgeoussomewhere.org/2007/11/18/our-american-sentences/ transforming my awkward landscape into somewhere gorgeous — maybe Mon, 06 Sep 2010 11:03:40 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0.1 By: chiefbiscuit http://mygorgeoussomewhere.org/2007/11/18/our-american-sentences/comment-page-1/#comment-931 chiefbiscuit Tue, 20 Nov 2007 07:26:14 +0000 http://mygorgeoussomewhere.org/2007/11/18/our-american-sentences/#comment-931 It's looking so good. Fantastic work to all concerned. It’s looking so good. Fantastic work to all concerned.

]]> By: Ceridwen http://mygorgeoussomewhere.org/2007/11/18/our-american-sentences/comment-page-1/#comment-929 Ceridwen Mon, 19 Nov 2007 16:05:33 +0000 http://mygorgeoussomewhere.org/2007/11/18/our-american-sentences/#comment-929 Paul, I don't know if it really holds together as a "group poem," but I think each and every line contributed is absolutely marvelous. I've read it thrice already, and that's a lot for me. I like your idea of the cutup technique. I should be more familiar with how Burroughs worked, but I am not. Can you describe this method in more detail? I think it sounds like a great thing for us to tackle together over at Read Write Poem. Paul, I don’t know if it really holds together as a “group poem,” but I think each and every line contributed is absolutely marvelous. I’ve read it thrice already, and that’s a lot for me.

I like your idea of the cutup technique. I should be more familiar with how Burroughs worked, but I am not. Can you describe this method in more detail? I think it sounds like a great thing for us to tackle together over at Read Write Poem.

]]> By: Paul Squires http://mygorgeoussomewhere.org/2007/11/18/our-american-sentences/comment-page-1/#comment-930 Paul Squires Mon, 19 Nov 2007 09:34:02 +0000 http://mygorgeoussomewhere.org/2007/11/18/our-american-sentences/#comment-930 Yes, that was an interesting experiment. One can almost follow a line of thought through it, perhaps two or three intertwined threads. I was just reading about collage as the defining modern artform and this is a good example of it. Perhaps we could do a William Seward Burroughs style cutup technique next. Or you could do it on this poem and get a kind of kaliedoscope effect. Thoughtprovoking indeed. Yes, that was an interesting experiment. One can almost follow a line of thought through it, perhaps two or three intertwined threads. I was just reading about collage as the defining modern artform and this is a good example of it. Perhaps we could do a William Seward Burroughs style cutup technique next. Or you could do it on this poem and get a kind of kaliedoscope effect. Thoughtprovoking indeed.

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